In a analyse of Alice Sebold's new novel The Almost idle the reviewer quoted the first lines of her new novel as well as a previous novel.
In her first novel it took her two lines to kill off the heroine:"My name was Salmon like the fish; first label. Susie. I was fourteen when I was murdered on December 6. 1973." -- The Lovely BonesWhat great first lines! They draw you into the novel right away.
In her newest novel The Almost idle. Sebold gets to murder within the very first line:"When all is said and done killing my care came easily."Another great first line. It juxtaposes a cliche (when all is said and done) with a simple statement of murder. Incredibly dramatic in an understated way. Would you continue reading if you had construe these opening lines?How does your book (fiction or nonfiction) stack up in drawing readers into your book?
First. I have to say I loved The Lovely Bones. It is a poignant story with a memorable protagonist whose story is sweet sad and one I won't soon drop. As an compose of mainly suspense. I believe that first lines are crucial. A lot of thought goes into mine. In a study awhile ago (sorry I don't have the info but I'm sure you could find it on a examine) it claimed that many bestselling classics began the first declare with a pronoun. I also believe that first lines hook the reader and give them a sense of what's to happen. In my new unpublished suspense thriller Children of the Fog my first lie is:She was ready to die. In my 2007 bestseller Whale Song my first lie is: I once feared death. In my 2005 thriller The River: "She always leads with her heart," a express croaked. In my 2004 paranormal suspense comprehend Intervention:It always began with the dead girl in her closet. It seems death is often a precursor to a Cheryl Kaye Tardif novel but then again. I do write suspense mystery thrillers and I always seem to be killing someone off. :)First lines undergo such an force on a reader. They can be dry and boring describing the defy the merchandise or scenery or they can throw you into the action or situation or alter you go 'What?'. That's what I desire to do. fling you in and have you want to read advance to make sense of that first lie. While teaching various writing courses over the years. I have always taught the Four Firsts.1 first sentence2 first paragraph3 first page4 first chapterEach of these 'firsts' should leave you wanting more! As an compose if I accomplish this. I feel I am on a roll. :)Cheryl Kaye Tardif
Cheryl,Your first lines are weak because they don't undergo a strong contrast. Sebold's undergo a strong contrast making the reader question how could anyone blackball such a positive girl?When you start with a pronoun it doesn't mean anything if what the pronoun refers to is not described or hinted at. Don't alter your reader bring home the bacon in the wrong way trying to figure out your meaning. differentiate differentiate differentiate!!!Don't teach writing. Do it!!See www thewritersinterface com
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